College Not Combat — Feedback requested

**Update: The sound has been fixed** **Update: The next entry has the latest version of the video, click the picture to see.** Hey, this is a piece that I’m submitting to Current TV for their contest that’s due tomorrow, May 20th. I’m planning to add a voice-over at the beginning of the piece, but haven’t had the chance yet. Please. Please. Give me feedback about how I can improve this piece. Thanks. inthecity@sbcglobal.net Thanks so much for any feedback you can give!